Post by vespertine2 on Oct 5, 2024 22:24:24 GMT -5
" Just like Mulan. She wasn’t supposed to be a warrior. No one believed in her, but she stepped up, fought through it all, and saved China"- Emily Dawson (You had a lot of good lines in here. But it's because I've watched Mulan so much as both Live Action and cartoon that I had to add it to fave lines. You are doing well, keep it up.)
"This punta ain't built to be a Champion at this point in his career, he's just a place holder until someone better comes around and that someone has arrived"- Ricky Sanchez (There was a lot in this one, had to reread it over a few times but this line just jumped out at me every time. Loved it. Shades of Eddie Guerrero throughout tho, loved it!)
"You dumb shits keep trying to hunt what you can’t kill."- Chris Page (Love this line. Almost along the lines of "You keep what you kill Riddick." Keep up the good work)
"you didn’t have to open tons of boxes, open hundreds of chocolate wrappings, hoping to find a golden ticket, you were handed one like that spoiled brat Veruca."- Cholo Santana (Hey a Charlie and the Chocolate Factory reference. Gotta love those old pop culture references in RPs. Love your writing, it flows smoothly and is easily readable. Keep up the good work.)
"The Storm.. is. Coming. to Monday Smash."- Deena Hixx (Nothing much to say about this. It says it all. It's a good catchphrase for you. Keep it up.)
"Clyde es like a little house cat, mang. Chu know de type—he's always lookin’ for attention, he wants chu to love him, to pet him. Wants to be fed, taken care of, like a soft little kitten. But when things get real, when the heat turns up, what does he do? He runs, amigo. Just like every house cat when they get scared. They don’t fight. They hide."- El Leon (?) (Gotta love the comparison of house cat to his opponent. Never seen a comparison like this in all the years I have been doing this strange hobby of ours. I like it.)
"It’s do or die for you, Mr. Page. This is your swan song because I’m going to put you in your place."- Tristan Slater (This is a great opening line for the actual onscreen promo. Loved it.)
"You and I are not the same, Shaun. Not even close to being the same. Get ready boi, I’m about to take you on the ride of a lifetime."- Ezra Gideon
"That I would allow you, Carnes, to walk into this match with confidence in the first place? Are you trying to shake it off like a maracas while listening to Taylor Swift? Let's face facts: even if you shake, rattle, and roll, you couldn't extinguish the flames. There is no easy way to break this to you, but I'll have you back to street vending in a heartbeat."- Clyde (YAY Pop culture references and references to songs from the 60s. Gotta love all those references.)
"I demand my respect and if I can not get it I will take it! Just like I'm going to take that X-Division championship and Ezra I know you're watching and you can take me lightly all you want but just know this, I am more focused and determined for this match than I ever was before. My desire to be great has only grown over time and now it's unstoppable and I refuse to settle for less than what I deserve."- Shaun Hart (Yes you do, probably more so than everyone here. I'm new so I don't know much but this is a good line that jumped out at me so even if you aren't, I'm still impressed.)
"Play all you want Cholo, use this time well to get accustomed to your lies as I am about to write a farewell letter to all the little Cholo fans out there."- Goth (Good line this.)
"But my name, it strikes fear. It makes you shake in your boots, it makes you second-guess your entire existence and your career choice"- Synn (I've been trying to do this with my characters for years. I'm jealous now. Keep up the excellent work, I can't wait to see where she goes from here.)
"MY PRISON IS INVISIBLE. It consists of these orderly little numbered boxes, carved out on glossy paper hanging on the wall – black x’s through the days that have passed because this is the only way to keep track."- Enigma (I gotta say I'm intrigued. Usually when I do these, the line I pick is usually in the middle or around the end of the RP but this was at the beginning. This was a first. Keep up the good work.)
"Can you stay on top of the mountain forever? For someone who preys on believing he is the next Kratos on Mount Olympus, the cloud does affect your thinking. While everyone has bought into your illusion of being this monstrosity immortalized, I saw right through you. I see an older man seeking the one actual cause of his life, which is to be put down with a warrior's death to be sent to Valhalla."- Amber Mansley (A Greek God mythology reference. Cool.)
"You're not targets. You're simply in the way. And I cannot afford to have anyone slow me down because I am going to become the Cannabis Cup champion and hold that trophy high above my head."- Gideon King (Everyone says this at one time or another. It's not the message itself but the way it is said. Out of everything you wrote, this one jumped out at me. Loving it. Keep it up.)
"Oh Romeo, Oh Risky,
Wherefore art thou Unconscious Suitor and the dirtiest of Sanchez's?
Doth ye vile curs lack the fortitude to so much as request
the formality of her time and presence?
Unnecessary...
Unwanted...
Useless.
If you're lucky though...
You won't end up in the bed next to your unconscious competition."- John "new breed" (A fucking poem? NICE! There was only one other person who could RP with poems like this. I wonder... Anyway I didn't put the whole poem, just the front and back of it because out of everything in this, I mean, come on, A POEM! Who doesn't like the poetry of this. I know I do. Fucking love this.)
"I mean I’d obviously be Professor X, without the wheelchair. Kenji would be Spider-Man, Ezra would be Thor, the girls Harper and Jetta respectively would be something like Spider-Gwen and Black Widow and we know that ultimately the good guys prevail and that’s just what’s going to happen on Smash this coming week..."- Kenji (Though said by Sebastian, an X man reference. Gotta love those pop culture comic references. This was an interesting one and hopefully we'll see the fruition of it in the future. I can't wait till it happens. In the meantime, good work. keep it up.)
"Without TFO, you, Ezra, Jetta and Harper get no shine, Cable fades into obscurity and Smash segmebts would only be soap operas surrounding Emily and her simps and formulaic Cholo bore fests."- Heather Harland (I like the first person POV in this. I'm assuming you do this all the time. Unlike others, the way you write, makes the reader want more of it. You are not afraid to use big words which is awesome. Keep up the good work.)
"Ezra, lad! Ye won’t believe this. Ye favorite lass is going to take her new friend to Heaven!" -Jetta Tall Ride (Not sure what I'm seeing. I'm thinking along the lines of a Japanese manga or anime. I was like "what the-" throughout the whole thing. But you nail the charicatures of anime characters well. So there is that...)
"Maya Angelou once said "You are the sum total of everything you've ever seen, heard, eaten, smelled, been told, forgot—it's all there. Everything influences each of us, and because of that I try to make sure that my experiences are positive." It is kind of funny that I am out here saying positive quotes where I am going to the ring with a King of the Bloodbath kingdom and a rising pirate in her own right."- Nick Danger (Everyone else had a quote from popular culture. Then you get a poem from John and then we get a quote from Maya Angelou. Fed and the people here are interesting I'll give you all that. I like what you did with this piece. Your fate talking back and forth to you. I want to see more as now I'm intrigued as to where this going to go. Keep up the good work.)
You can do this yourself if you feel so inclined.
"This punta ain't built to be a Champion at this point in his career, he's just a place holder until someone better comes around and that someone has arrived"- Ricky Sanchez (There was a lot in this one, had to reread it over a few times but this line just jumped out at me every time. Loved it. Shades of Eddie Guerrero throughout tho, loved it!)
"You dumb shits keep trying to hunt what you can’t kill."- Chris Page (Love this line. Almost along the lines of "You keep what you kill Riddick." Keep up the good work)
"you didn’t have to open tons of boxes, open hundreds of chocolate wrappings, hoping to find a golden ticket, you were handed one like that spoiled brat Veruca."- Cholo Santana (Hey a Charlie and the Chocolate Factory reference. Gotta love those old pop culture references in RPs. Love your writing, it flows smoothly and is easily readable. Keep up the good work.)
"The Storm.. is. Coming. to Monday Smash."- Deena Hixx (Nothing much to say about this. It says it all. It's a good catchphrase for you. Keep it up.)
"Clyde es like a little house cat, mang. Chu know de type—he's always lookin’ for attention, he wants chu to love him, to pet him. Wants to be fed, taken care of, like a soft little kitten. But when things get real, when the heat turns up, what does he do? He runs, amigo. Just like every house cat when they get scared. They don’t fight. They hide."- El Leon (?) (Gotta love the comparison of house cat to his opponent. Never seen a comparison like this in all the years I have been doing this strange hobby of ours. I like it.)
"It’s do or die for you, Mr. Page. This is your swan song because I’m going to put you in your place."- Tristan Slater (This is a great opening line for the actual onscreen promo. Loved it.)
"You and I are not the same, Shaun. Not even close to being the same. Get ready boi, I’m about to take you on the ride of a lifetime."- Ezra Gideon
"That I would allow you, Carnes, to walk into this match with confidence in the first place? Are you trying to shake it off like a maracas while listening to Taylor Swift? Let's face facts: even if you shake, rattle, and roll, you couldn't extinguish the flames. There is no easy way to break this to you, but I'll have you back to street vending in a heartbeat."- Clyde (YAY Pop culture references and references to songs from the 60s. Gotta love all those references.)
"I demand my respect and if I can not get it I will take it! Just like I'm going to take that X-Division championship and Ezra I know you're watching and you can take me lightly all you want but just know this, I am more focused and determined for this match than I ever was before. My desire to be great has only grown over time and now it's unstoppable and I refuse to settle for less than what I deserve."- Shaun Hart (Yes you do, probably more so than everyone here. I'm new so I don't know much but this is a good line that jumped out at me so even if you aren't, I'm still impressed.)
"Play all you want Cholo, use this time well to get accustomed to your lies as I am about to write a farewell letter to all the little Cholo fans out there."- Goth (Good line this.)
"But my name, it strikes fear. It makes you shake in your boots, it makes you second-guess your entire existence and your career choice"- Synn (I've been trying to do this with my characters for years. I'm jealous now. Keep up the excellent work, I can't wait to see where she goes from here.)
"MY PRISON IS INVISIBLE. It consists of these orderly little numbered boxes, carved out on glossy paper hanging on the wall – black x’s through the days that have passed because this is the only way to keep track."- Enigma (I gotta say I'm intrigued. Usually when I do these, the line I pick is usually in the middle or around the end of the RP but this was at the beginning. This was a first. Keep up the good work.)
"Can you stay on top of the mountain forever? For someone who preys on believing he is the next Kratos on Mount Olympus, the cloud does affect your thinking. While everyone has bought into your illusion of being this monstrosity immortalized, I saw right through you. I see an older man seeking the one actual cause of his life, which is to be put down with a warrior's death to be sent to Valhalla."- Amber Mansley (A Greek God mythology reference. Cool.)
"You're not targets. You're simply in the way. And I cannot afford to have anyone slow me down because I am going to become the Cannabis Cup champion and hold that trophy high above my head."- Gideon King (Everyone says this at one time or another. It's not the message itself but the way it is said. Out of everything you wrote, this one jumped out at me. Loving it. Keep it up.)
"Oh Romeo, Oh Risky,
Wherefore art thou Unconscious Suitor and the dirtiest of Sanchez's?
Doth ye vile curs lack the fortitude to so much as request
the formality of her time and presence?
Unnecessary...
Unwanted...
Useless.
If you're lucky though...
You won't end up in the bed next to your unconscious competition."- John "new breed" (A fucking poem? NICE! There was only one other person who could RP with poems like this. I wonder... Anyway I didn't put the whole poem, just the front and back of it because out of everything in this, I mean, come on, A POEM! Who doesn't like the poetry of this. I know I do. Fucking love this.)
"I mean I’d obviously be Professor X, without the wheelchair. Kenji would be Spider-Man, Ezra would be Thor, the girls Harper and Jetta respectively would be something like Spider-Gwen and Black Widow and we know that ultimately the good guys prevail and that’s just what’s going to happen on Smash this coming week..."- Kenji (Though said by Sebastian, an X man reference. Gotta love those pop culture comic references. This was an interesting one and hopefully we'll see the fruition of it in the future. I can't wait till it happens. In the meantime, good work. keep it up.)
"Without TFO, you, Ezra, Jetta and Harper get no shine, Cable fades into obscurity and Smash segmebts would only be soap operas surrounding Emily and her simps and formulaic Cholo bore fests."- Heather Harland (I like the first person POV in this. I'm assuming you do this all the time. Unlike others, the way you write, makes the reader want more of it. You are not afraid to use big words which is awesome. Keep up the good work.)
"Ezra, lad! Ye won’t believe this. Ye favorite lass is going to take her new friend to Heaven!" -Jetta Tall Ride (Not sure what I'm seeing. I'm thinking along the lines of a Japanese manga or anime. I was like "what the-" throughout the whole thing. But you nail the charicatures of anime characters well. So there is that...)
"Maya Angelou once said "You are the sum total of everything you've ever seen, heard, eaten, smelled, been told, forgot—it's all there. Everything influences each of us, and because of that I try to make sure that my experiences are positive." It is kind of funny that I am out here saying positive quotes where I am going to the ring with a King of the Bloodbath kingdom and a rising pirate in her own right."- Nick Danger (Everyone else had a quote from popular culture. Then you get a poem from John and then we get a quote from Maya Angelou. Fed and the people here are interesting I'll give you all that. I like what you did with this piece. Your fate talking back and forth to you. I want to see more as now I'm intrigued as to where this going to go. Keep up the good work.)
You can do this yourself if you feel so inclined.